Hello friend. I enjoyed reading your story because it shows how one decision can completely change a person's life. The way you introduced Neetu and her dreams before bringing Abir into the story made it easy to understand the emotions behind her choices. I also like that you showed how happy they were at first before the problems started. That made the ending more touching.
The phone call from Banya was the part that surprised me the most because it completely changed the direction of the story. I also think Neetu's decision to return to her parents showed that she had learned from her mistakes, even though it came after going through so much pain.
One small suggestion is that you could give Abir's change in behavior a little more explanation before the phone call, so readers can feel the suspense even more. Overall, it was an emotional story with a meaningful lesson about trust, family, and the consequences of our choices.

Thank you for sharing it with us, and I wish you success in the contest. 🌹