Welcome to steemit sweetheart. I went through your story. I must confess you're an intelligent storyteller, however, you need proper mentorship on how to create a quality dairy game post.

Your diary story should have the days date. It should carry at least 3 different pictures of how you spend your day.
Then also make it lengthy approximately 500 to 800 words.

Meanwhile your tags a completely out of order. And you should always check your grammatical and punctuation errors.
Meet you mentor for proper mentorship.
Thank you for sharing with us how you spend your day.
Keep steeming 💙